PW: (12/12/17)

PW: (12/12/17)

For my Error Log/ EDITS
- In Essay#2 and #3, there are some paragraphs that I did not fully answer to the prompt. So I need to add more evidence to prove and answer to the prompts.
First Draft

Part of tourist’s lifestyle is traveling around the world because they want to spend time with their family or friends. They probably do not want to consider about money when they want to have fun in the different new place for them. Therefore, when tourists come to one of the most expensive place in San Francisco, which is Fisherman’s Wharf, they are willing to buy anything for their loved one, family and friends. While I am working, I noticed that there are two different taxes which are 8.5% for Sales Taxes and 2.5% for Fisherman’s Wharf area. Even though taxes are expensive, tourists are still buying gifts because they want to keep their happy memories and time they spend in San Francisco. The most popular thing to sell from my store is that the crab which is a sign of the Fisherman’s Wharf. It is because they want to explore the experiment, activities, artifacts in San Francisco as much they can. The reason is that being a human when everybody feels happy when we travel around and experience new things the time we have not experienced. Therefore, the belief of the tourists wants to explore the culture of the resident and what is the history behind.

After Revision

Part of tourist’s lifestyle is traveling around the world because they want to spend time with their family or friends. They probably do not want to consider about money when they want to have fun in the different new place for them. Therefore, when tourists come to one of the most expensive place in San Francisco, which is Fisherman’s Wharf, they are willing to buy anything for their loved one. Another part of tourist's lifestyle is that taking pictures because they want to hold on to memories and share with other their family members or friends. One of the popular places to take pictures in San Francisco is the sign with Fisherman’s Wharf. It is because the main audience for this sign is for the tourists to persuade to visit San Francisco. Tourists love to explore the moment of spending time in San Francisco with activities and artifacts. The reason is that being a human when everybody feels happy when we travel around and experience new things the time we have not experienced. Therefore, the belief of the tourists wants to explore the culture of the resident, and what is the history behind because of the enormous sign in Fisherman’s Wharf.

- For Essay#4, the main theme is revision. So I included all of my essays as my quote to support my theme. Also, I will talk about revision is my new lesson to learn in this semester and that is the key in academic writing and reading.